[自創小說]小丹傻左 o口o [複製鏈接]

有一日 迪雲同小丹去踢波…. K%v1xZ  
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由迪雲發動攻勢 小丹一招真豹影拳將個波炸爆左 "ZM4F?x  
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迪雲好大聲咁罵小丹:你做緊咩啊!!! j>-gO,v, y  
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小丹話:我咪係到玩你!!! F8:vDv  
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迪雲粗聲粗氣咁講:你比番個波我啊!!!個波係大哥送比我既!!!你至小比番1000蚊我!!! ,'xYlH3s  
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小丹話:我比番一個全世界得一個既波你啦!!! ^.dsW0"0  
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(小丹進行異轉 用音速射球射向迪雲 迪雲瓜左) scLn=  
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小丹話:啦!!!波我就比左你 係你接唔到姐!!! 88啦!!! ojvj}ln  
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係就係好短希望大家中意      註明:100分全分 唔好踩到咁勁~~~

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2.最重要個樣...就係人物性格..

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別再POST你的爛文了

迪雲咁容易死

gag 爆 - - 未見過 音速射球當足球

大佬..夠了-_-你練好你d文筆先啦

一個真昇頂開佢啦--

又在放爛文的小子給我過來 dqU~`b
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讓我請你吃個波餅,使你的文沒這樣爛

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笑死我啦

只可以話好好笑

滴露大大看完你作的東西既評句 ROH|PKb7  
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還真想狠狠地揮拳打向顯示器呢 Xr,1&"B&t  
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你的文真是有吸引力 yuh *  
請你努力作多一些:)

唔?好好聽呀,繼續作落去!

有d無聊 but都好好笑- -

都係0分,要重作 n3WlZ!$  
原因:又係爛到爆

呀生!迪雲咁易死,你唔好話佢比故事1-學校d車手1拳打死!

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迪雲傻左 .^`{1%  
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有一日迪雲行行下街見到小丹  fgTg7 m  
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迪雲:hello你個頭!真升龍霸 LBeF&sb6  
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你係都整長小小先la plx

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0分算比多你 0],r0  
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希望你會進步吧= = 5DU6rks%
 
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迷:4502 進步?!難呀!

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好文好文 $99n&t$Y  
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