[自創小說]小丹傻左 o口o [複製鏈接]

有一日 迪雲同小丹去踢波…. b>'c   
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由迪雲發動攻勢 小丹一招真豹影拳將個波炸爆左 (62Sc]  
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迪雲好大聲咁罵小丹:你做緊咩啊!!! MQX9BJ%  
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小丹話:我咪係到玩你!!! 
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迪雲粗聲粗氣咁講:你比番個波我啊!!!個波係大哥送比我既!!!你至小比番1000蚊我!!! 66po SZR@  
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小丹話:我比番一個全世界得一個既波你啦!!! ) Loh
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小丹話:啦!!!波我就比左你 係你接唔到姐!!! 88啦!!! ;Ji3|=4u  
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係就係好短希望大家中意      註明:100分全分 唔好踩到咁勁~~~

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2.最重要個樣...就係人物性格..

爛到x咁呀= =好無聊= =

別再POST你的爛文了

迪雲咁容易死

gag 爆 - - 未見過 音速射球當足球

大佬..夠了-_-你練好你d文筆先啦

一個真昇頂開佢啦--

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讓我請你吃個波餅,使你的文沒這樣爛

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笑死我啦

只可以話好好笑

滴露大大看完你作的東西既評句 "4.A@XsY  
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還真想狠狠地揮拳打向顯示器呢 A9LVS&52  
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你的文真是有吸引力 H~W
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請你努力作多一些:)

唔?好好聽呀,繼續作落去!

有d無聊 but都好好笑- -

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原因:又係爛到爆

呀生!迪雲咁易死,你唔好話佢比故事1-學校d車手1拳打死!

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迷:4502 進步?!難呀!

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